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Lost in a trance
Watching you dance
As you take your clothes off
For me
You're everything
I don't need
But still I cant
Walk away
You know I'm falling
Falling too deep
Falling for her
Falling for her
She talks to me
She makes me see
All the things I can't
With you
Dirty minds
Disgusting lies
If you were in my shoes
Would you stay?
You know I'm Failing
I'm failing you
Failing your trust
Failing your trust
I've lost my mind
I see her eyes
Every time
I close mine
And I know its not much
But I still feel your touch
Even after
All this time
But now I've fallen
Fallen too deep
Fallen in love
Now I'm in love
It's just not with you.
~QuestionEverything
Watching you dance
As you take your clothes off
For me
You're everything
I don't need
But still I cant
Walk away
You know I'm falling
Falling too deep
Falling for her
Falling for her
She talks to me
She makes me see
All the things I can't
With you
Dirty minds
Disgusting lies
If you were in my shoes
Would you stay?
You know I'm Failing
I'm failing you
Failing your trust
Failing your trust
I've lost my mind
I see her eyes
Every time
I close mine
And I know its not much
But I still feel your touch
Even after
All this time
But now I've fallen
Fallen too deep
Fallen in love
Now I'm in love
It's just not with you.
~QuestionEverything
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactThe art of seduction, a deadly art it is. The tragic sense of struggle and the inevitable feeling of futility really emphasises the beauty of this piece.
I find the final line to sum it all up, fallen in love just not with you and the repetition of the word falling drills in the feeling as if we were falling ourselves.
So all in all a beautiful piece, seduction at it's deadliest and the narrating fights a losing battle and in the end he has clearly succumb.
Got to love tragic beauty and it's just that and more in this piece, well done.